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Nothing serious, he says.

How simple these words can be,
When he doesn't even see,
They aren't working for me.

Nothing serious, he implores.

Six Syllables,
Fourteen letters together-
-We react, exactly like, lace and leather.
Merely to those simple,
Fourteen letters.

Nothing serious, he says.

Just one little line,
Was supposed to sway our minds?
Not this time,
I won't forget all the days I've cried.

Nothing serious, he presses.

When will he see?
These words scare me,
More then anything.
sdkjfndjbsncjvdfsfjcdsjfksdjfkjsdkfj. Like I said, I should stop writing, but this just popped into my head. Like everything else, I need to edit.
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SilverKaname Nov 21, 2011  Hobbyist Artist
Those words scare the shit outta me too! Nothing serious pfft It always is for me
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:icondesire-is-never-fair:
I know! He know it means a lot to me that he's okay...But, Nothing Serious is always what everyone tells me..
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TheSkaBoss Nov 2, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I'm afraid this isn't a Traditional Fixed form ([link] <- Wiki page on forms for future reference)

Whilst it's a good poem in itself, it needs to be placed in the 'free verse' category.

As a general rule, if you're ever in doubt as to where your poetry goes, it goes in free verse. Trust me, you'd KNOW if you were writing anything else.
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:icondesire-is-never-fair:
Okai, thank chuu friend! ^^
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TheSkaBoss Nov 2, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
No problem. :)
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Retrubutionist777 Nov 2, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
This is amazing and so full of truth and emotion!!!
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:icondesire-is-never-fair:
GAAAAAAAAAAAAAH, SOOO SWEET TO MY TERRIBLE WORK!! :iconhappytearsplz:
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Retrubutionist777 Nov 2, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:huggle: I'm really pleased I could make you feel happy! And its not terrible, your poems have so much emotion in them!
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:icondesire-is-never-fair:
T-Thank chuuuu! :iconawwwplz:
Psh, you always make meh happppy` :iconhappy-plz:
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